Snap Shot Poems From My Day(a strange style for me, but freeing)

Lucy
May 16, 2008 at 4:27 PM
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Snap Shot Poems

Garden Man

there is something striking

about the dark hair in the white skin

across his breast

thinning as it trails down

into his denims

a patch of animal fur

tinged by his scent

under the skin, the small snakes

of his muscles bulge and writhe

he walks across the green expanse

in the withering sun

he makes things grow

in other people's yards

Construction Woman

The woman ripened like a berry

in the summer sun

under her hard hat

chestnut pigtails dangled

like tiny bits of rope

her face was creased

and in every fold

was a story

only I was driving by too fast

Lucy Simpson

Seattle

5/2008

I don't like lilacs

they are too sweet

like a girl in the second grade

who everyone loves

because she resembles the Sunbeam

bread girl from the bag

but who claws me under the table

only I can't howl

because I'll be sent to the office

I'm allergic to lilacs

though everyone loves them

Lucy Simpson

Seattle

5/2008

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Loved these snap shot poems, I could see the gardner, the woman construction worker, all in my mind, so vividly!!!

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These are both beautiful. Full of wonderful imagery. I like the Sunbeam bread bag girl image and the ripened berry of a construction woman...

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real life people. love it. I also love lilacs. oops.

oh the Construction Woman is my fave... oh yes oh yes!!!

candy

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I love the last one, that little girl reminds me of one I once knew. She was thought to be perfect, but I saw her evil flaws.

Garden Man and Construction Woman.....such powerful imagery there.....

I love lilacs.....the smell is wonderful and reminds me of solitary and safe moments from my childhood....but now I admire them from afar....funny how that is, huh ??

thanks Tammie. :)

thanks farfaraway. I enjoyed writing them. I've been in a very sensual state lately.

Lucy

Isn't it interesting what our different moods can produce? Keep up the good work.

thanks Sweet Misery. :)

she is a glorious site with her chestnut pigtails. I like writing these sensual poems. I call them snap shots, because it is what I notice in my day.

Lucy

Lucy replied to LaidOutInLavender’s comment:
May 18, 2008
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the devil is four feet tall with perfect curls. :) You got to watch out for the cloven hoofs tough.

Lucy

thanks Lbreeze. My favorite childhood flowers were white peonies. They seemed like more perfect roses to me.

Lucy

LaidOutInLavender replied to Lucy’s comment:
May 19, 2008
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So True!
Are you really allergic to lilac? If so I will need to get the huge bouquets out of my home before you enter

hey your the one doing the writing. great stuff my dear. thank you

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I like the lilac poem the best of the three of them, but the construction man poem is good too. The lilac poem reminds me of Whitman's "When Lilacs Last in the Dooryard Bloomed," a beautiful poem written for Abe Lincoln.